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:iconalahay:
You can interpret it as both failed-suicide note and failed suicide-note. The fact that I am still around to share it is more in favor of the former postulate...

Anyway, it's good to keep a good pen handy for such occasions.

For *tomorrow1's contest Playin in Dead World [link]
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Critique by *allieryan Oct 6, 2010, 2:57:49 PM
The black-and-white was an excellent choice for this shot. It just gives emphasis to the message and the desperation that was evident in the groves in the paper from when the writer was trying to get the pen to work. By making this conscious choice of having the work be black in white, you can see these details in a more vivid light, to say the least.

As to the actual technique of having the pen run out of ink and such a critical moment in the letter, it makes me wonder that perhaps this was a good thing. Perhaps the lack of ink was the thing that was most needed; sometimes not being able to finish the goodbye letter is enough to prevent the suicide and then that individual is able find something that is worth living for. This hesitation after being unable to complete the letter, delays the actual act, perhaps indefinitely.

Now if you were ever to do a re-shoot of this piece I would lean towards the idea of changing the wording. True you can't see the beginning of the letter, but the words "cruel world" does seem to be a bit cliched; I would favor changing this to something perhaps more personal for the actual situation. It does seem to be a bit generic and lessens the impact.

Suicide is certainly very serious and this piece has given me the opportunity to reflect upon this matter. So thank you for that, and I overall I think you did a wonderful job executing the message and meaning behind the piece.
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~Alex0Jericho Mar 5, 2011
brave as it is powerful~
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=alahay Mar 6, 2011
:)
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*allieryan Sep 14, 2010   Writer
The black-and-white was an excellent choice for this shot. It just gives emphasis to the message and the desperation that was evident in the groves in the paper from when the writer was trying to get the pen to work. But perhaps a lack of pen was the thing that was most needed; sometimes not being able to finish the goodbye letter is enough to prevent the suicide and then that individual is able find something that is worth living for.

Plus, an interesting play on words.
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=alahay Sep 17, 2010
I see you chose my favorite and most critiquable, in my opinion, to perpetuate them with the adequate words.
Thank you very much for your careful observation!
I wish it would have gone into critique mode though!
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*allieryan Oct 6, 2010   Writer
Finally was able to actual critique this. It kept having a constant difficulty of loading before, so I couldn't do it. I did reuse some of my original comment, but I certainly expanded it.
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=alahay Oct 6, 2010
Allie, I am so excited about the critique! Thanks a lot and please come back for more, I promise you only the most conceptual and thought provoking of arts :)
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*allieryan Oct 10, 2010   Writer
I'm certain of it; by the way you have earned yourself another watcher :D
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=alahay Oct 11, 2010
not just another watcher but my favorite! Thanks so much!
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*allieryan Oct 13, 2010   Writer
You're welcome! Now at some point in the future I actually have to go through your entire gallery. But alas, the joys of having midterms impede on my social life both real and virtual.
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=alahay Sep 8, 2010
117 Downloads?? Where is this going?
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